Monday, 24 June 2013

My Rock


You stood by me and saw me rise
You were my earth, my wings

You held my hands and let me soar
You were my steps, my core

You walked with me to new heights
You were my guide, my light

You flew with me to the sky
You were my flight, my eyes


My Rock


I fell down,
You stood by me
You stood by me to see me drown
You stood by me and saw me sink
You stood by me and saw me fail
You stood by me and saw me fall
You stood by me and never picked me up
You chained me and pushed me down


My Rock


Written for Poetry Jam with prompt - rock
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30 comments:

  1. Diwakar Narayan24 June 2013 at 03:27

    It was a u-turn!

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  2. Unknown24 June 2013 at 03:33

    I found first half very romantic. However, second part is very sad.

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  3. Roshan Yadav24 June 2013 at 03:45

    its sounds like now a days story...
    that person didn't hold you when you were
    falling form heights
    what i feel about any female is
    "her morals are to be respected"


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    1. Unknown24 June 2013 at 04:58

      Yes Roshan it happens quite a lot..and am glad you feel like that :)

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  4. J Cosmo Newbery24 June 2013 at 03:59

    Yeah. I've had relationships like that. Too rocky by far.

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  5. Vandana Sharma24 June 2013 at 04:19

    Wow,,ironies depicted very nicely...

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  6. MylifeManya24 June 2013 at 04:29

    No words !!!!!!

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  7. Susie Clevenger24 June 2013 at 10:08

    The rock lifts only to crush. Love happens that way at times....lovely piece.

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  8. Shrikant24 June 2013 at 11:01

    Lovely way to put forth antithetical emotions. Positive in the first part and Negative in the second and fusing wonderfully in the middle in flight and fall. Liked it a lot

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  9. Roshni24 June 2013 at 11:53

    wow! This is so beautiful, Sfurti!

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  10. Helen24 June 2013 at 19:13

    Wow! I didn't see the second half of your poem coming .. nice writing!!

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  11. The Mukhtiars25 June 2013 at 06:02

    Lovely , beautiful

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  12. Ella25 June 2013 at 07:34

    Love does this...it is a dizzy
    dance
    Painful, raw and real

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  13. Brian Miller25 June 2013 at 19:38

    ugh not the kind of rock i suspected...
    yep, dont need someone to weigh me down...

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  14. Anonymous25 June 2013 at 20:51

    Liked the flip side of it.....but LOVED THE FIRST HALF...Lovely

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    1. Unknown25 June 2013 at 22:20

      Thanks Shellymona...THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!! :))

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  15. Laurie Kolp26 June 2013 at 14:59

    Lovely... we all need a rock like that!

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  16. Peggy2 July 2013 at 11:52

    Two very different views of the rock here. I hope your first poem is the true one!

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    1. Unknown3 July 2013 at 01:59

      Hey Peggy..yess I am blessed with a rock solid support!!! :D

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