I walk barefoot with no direction
My direction lost with you
You scratched my soul
You stabbed deep in my heart
The void is still there
Your marks are still there
I look for you in no direction
I walk barefoot with no direction
I walk leaving blood spots
If you ever come looking for me
You will find my blood,
You will find pieces of me scattered here and there
I keep falling in no direction
I walk barefoot with no direction
With sin eating me away one by one
Nothing left, all eaten away
I only have eyes left, to wait for you
I wait for you in no direction
Tragic and wonderful. Such hurt and pain caused by another person.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Del :)
DeleteI can feel the loss in this. The repetition works really well.
ReplyDeleteThanks Lolamouse :))
DeleteI agree with Lola and the repetition reinforces the feel of footsteps and heartbeat...
ReplyDeleteGreat response.
Thanks so much Hannah!
DeleteWhat a beautiful expression! You have a way with words Sf!
ReplyDeleteThanks Gauri :D
DeleteSo painful. Liked the intensity of it.
ReplyDeleteThanks Diwakar :)
DeleteThis is definitely what loss feels like and I love the way the repeating lines enhance and underline those feelings. Beautifully done.
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Sherry :)
DeleteI feel the pain of loss throughout this piece. The repetition is so effective.
ReplyDeleteThanks Susie :)
DeleteTruly heart-felt writing. Full of hurt and hope.
ReplyDeletePiercing. Found this very moving.
ReplyDeleteThanks Frankie :)
DeleteReally enchanting.
ReplyDeleteThanks dear!
DeleteCan feel the emotional longing. Enjoyed this poem.
ReplyDeleteThanks Rasma :)
Deletebeautiful one
ReplyDeleteThanks dear :)
DeleteYou will find pieces of me scattered here and there - so much pain in your words. Could feel the loss!
ReplyDeleteThanks Robyn!
DeleteTouching poem!
ReplyDeleteThanks Uma :)
DeleteThis is haunting and made more so by the repetition, which only intensifies the lost feeling.
ReplyDeleteThanks Fireblossom!
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