An Indian Love Song

HE

Come close let me see your face

My love

Don’t hide the glow,

Don’t cover the fire

My love

Let me breath in your scent

Let me sleep in your manes

I am lost

In you

In your silken contour

In your brazen inferno

Give me life

Let me drink your core

Let me find my soul

In the magical nectar of your kiss

 SHE

How do I let you breath in me?

How do I burn you in my fire?

How do I lose myself in you?

How do I show my face to you

My face is veiled to follow the laws of my land

Our love will set a blaze, not only

The veil

But my land

Your land

The feud of old faiths and beliefs

The blood of numerous griefs

Will be on our hands

HE

What is my land?

What is your land?

Our heart hears both

The sound of temple bells

And

The cry of the muezzin

Our love will conquer all

The rage, the tears

The blood, the fears

We will write a new dharma

We will preach a new karma

Devoid of fear

swarming with love

(C) Juztamom

Shared with NaPoWriMo. The prompt was to rewrite a famous poem, giving it your own spin. I have used "An Indian Love Song" by Sarojini Naidu. Do read it. I am not sure if I was able to spin it differently or if I did any justice to her work. Her words are magical, any attempt to rewrite her poems is futile but it gives me an opportunity to read her again and again.

I did something similar few months back, as in I tried working on one of her other poems "A Cradle Song" . 

Do read my attempt on it. Its called "Little Lovely Dreams". This poem is very close to my heart for various reasons. One of the most important being, I sing it as a lullaby to my kids even now.

Some of the fellow participants:

http://janakinagraj.com/  – Janaki

http://jaibalarao.com/   - Jaibala

http://poojashridhar.blogspot.in/ – Pooja

http://andiwrite.com/ – Count

http://ponderingtwo.blogspot.in/ – Rohan

http://advkaranshah.blogspot.in/ – Karan

http://www.rinzurajan.blogspot.in/ – Rinzu

http://artofleo.wordpress.com/blog/– Vinay

 http://thoughtspop.wordpress.com/ – Nithya

http://viewsofpreethib.wordpress.com/ – Preeti

http://whilethecoffeebrews.blogspot.in/- Naina