I
sit at the corner
See
you walk by
I
see life pass by me
I
have been here for eternity
Waiting
on you
Waiting
for you
You draw
closer and closer
And look
through me
Your
eyes wondering on and around
I
wait for them to stop
Stop
by me
Halt
on me
I
want you to look at me
But
you move on
One
look never enough
One
me not enough
The
day I saw you,
My eyes
were seized
My
heart was lost
I was
lost in your world
You became
my world
My
world alone and lonely
With
you but without you
You
are here
But
I am waiting for you
One
day you will look at me
Your
eyes will see me
Your
heart will feel me
My
soul will touch yours
I
will not bleed or cry
I
will not plead or die
Till
then
I
will wait
On
you
I
will wait
For you
(C) Juztamom 2013
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As per the prompt this is an old poem. Have edited, re phrased, revamped it quite a lot.
Effective use of the almost repetitions... a lot of longing and hope as well.. Lovely result
ReplyDeletethis breaks my heart a bit...one waiting so much - the desire palpable and the other seeing through that person even when close - oh i hope they see each other in the eyes one day
ReplyDeleteI like the way you've used repetition, too. And you do evoke that almost desperate feeling of need someone, of wanting to be noticed.
ReplyDeleteyeah i def like the echo of repetition in this as well, really strong emotion there in that last stanza in particular....
ReplyDeleteSfurti the poem is very touching and soulful.Full of pathos and emotions.I loved reading it.
ReplyDeleteahww, longing, the heart never ceases wanting to be touched! I really like how you styled this, it's unique:)
ReplyDeleteYour words make my heart wish....and tremble.
ReplyDeleteLoving that last stanza...
ReplyDeleteMy heart broke in two reading this, the longing and heartache is palpable.
ReplyDeleteLovely piece! the emotions are so clear cut and perhaps that is what helps in moving on with hope
ReplyDelete... a lesson we must all learn - the hard way. The repetition of certain words gives it a waiting feeling.
ReplyDeleteIt's always good to get on with life - waiting around might mean we miss what is better just around the corner. :)