Hidden behind the wall I see a shadow of a man, a man I supposedly love. His hands are
around her waist; almost embracing her whole body, caressing slowly, his mouth is
hungrily feeding on her mouth with a hunger that I have never experienced with
him. My husband of 6 years who once said he would die but touch any other
woman, who rarely touched me anymore, is ravishing someone else and then suddenly
they turn and I see her face.
Tears roll down my cheeks and I yell in disbelief
as I see my best friend, my life support in my husband’s arms. True to his word
my husband has not touched any other woman; he is with "V", my friend, my best friend, my guy friend Vikas!
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Story in 5 lines! WOW!! I should also try this prompt. Nicely done Sfurti. :) Love, friendship, deceit, all in one..
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Pooja. Will wait for your version, am sure it will be fabulous :)
DeleteWow!
ReplyDeleteI was wondering where you vanished when I saw that last update was in October. Good to see you blogging again Sfurti!
Ritu thanks so much, especially for checking on me. Was unwell but look forward to writing more and more now :)
DeleteAwesome, what a rendition!
ReplyDeleteThanks so much Meow!
Deletebeing an observer of life in comical sense ... I had a smile on the face.While the intensity of the story remain intact. You are a remarkable story-teller dear Sfurti ma'm
ReplyDeleteMysay..first of all welcome back dear. We missed you here. And now thank you so much for your lovely compliment. I still struggle with stories :)
DeletePS: I read it again now and I can also see the comical sense at the end :)
Such an emotional story in just five lines!! Wonderful. Best of luck for the contest.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Ushaji :)
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Thanks Surabhi :)
DeleteKahaani me kya twist hai !
ReplyDeletereminded me of Bombay talkies movie. Good way of narrating in just a few lines :)
Thanks Afshan. Have not seen the movie but I am aware it is on a similar theme :)
DeleteOh wow! That was awesome :)
ReplyDeleteThanks Soumya :)
DeleteThat is such an interesting take !! What a twist.. Vikas ??? Super..
ReplyDeleteAwwww.....this was good!
ReplyDeleteWow! A nice take on the prompt!
ReplyDeleteYeah, he kept his promise in a way. That was a twist in the story! :)
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