I grab my car keys and at a frantic pace
run and come out of the main door only to realise that my car is not where I
parked it and that shadow is still following me. Suddenly I start feeling very
cold and realise that I have no clothes on, that I am completely naked but
inspite of that I continue to run towards the main road with a hope that somebody
will see me, hear me and hopefully save me from him. As I reach the main road I
realise there is a huge commotion on the side, everyone is standing and looking
at something familiar. I run towards it and see that it is my car rammed
against the tree covered in blood. I try to cover myself with my hands and
start screaming, start asking what is happening, who is in my car but no one is
looking at me, it’s like they can’t hear me, like I am invisible.
Suddenly I
feel a tap on my shoulder and turn around and see that shadow, a man with no
face, a man with only a dark stature and no features. He holds my hand and
tells me, this is you inside the car, you are dead. I am your shadow, your
karma, everything you owned is gone, everyone you loved is left behind, from
this moment on you have only me. He engulfs me and says I am as fair as your
actions were and as black as thoughts were which means from this moment on You Are Me.
Image credit here. I am taking part in the Write tribe Festival of Words and the first prompt is 9-Sentence Fiction. To participate or to know more about it please visit here
Nice Post.. enjoyed readin it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Ananya :)
DeleteWow!!! Wonderful read!!! And i thought 9-sentence fiction would be really,really short.
ReplyDeleteJini I am glad you enjoyed it :)
DeleteInteresting suspense. Feasible feelings!
ReplyDeleteCarol thank you so much :)
Deleteay yai yai... that last sentence scared more than anything else :) Reminded me that one day I'm going to be judged by my actions so I better clean up my act.
ReplyDeleteGood take on the prompt.
Thanks Roshan. I am thrilled I scared you :P
DeleteOOH!! Dark in theme and visually appealing in rendition. It reminded me of a frightening dream I used to have. Nicely done!
ReplyDeleteThanks Shailaja. It is similar to a dream I often have. :)
DeleteNo one escapes their karma. But I hope that when we cross over to the other side that there will be only light and not darkness.
ReplyDeleteThanks Suzy, I hope so too :)
DeleteGoosebumps!
ReplyDeleteYay for them Tulika :)
Deletewoah! that's dark!! Indeed the moment we die everything is left behind!
ReplyDeleteThanks Nibhz :)
DeleteAs fair as your actions and as dark as your evil thoughts,how true?
ReplyDeleteIt's sad that we are shadows when we most need to be visible.
ReplyDeleteMichelle :)
DeleteOMG !! This was one engrossing piece of work. I can still feel the chill. A gripping narration, and a very intelligent twist at the end ! Kudos over this! :)
ReplyDeleteSreeja Thank you so much for your wonderful comment. I am glad you liked it.
DeleteI typed in a comment and I don;t know where it disappeared :O Loved this story and this is what everyone means when they say that all of us have to face consequences of our actions in His court. Wonderful story Sfurti :)
ReplyDeletePrasanna it must be the moderation, sometimes it eats up comments :). Thank you so much for visiting and for you encouraging words also :)
DeleteWow...I fet a shudder for a moment...that's possibly my worst fear !
ReplyDeleteProfound as can be..!!
ReplyDeleteScary too.
Chilling. I can't help wonder what I will make when the shadow comes to take me. I mean, I've heard bout the myth but it's scarily well written.
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You are turning into quite a fiction writer :)
ReplyDeleteAwesome write up....The ending lines were deep and thoughtful ....
ReplyDeleteI had goosebumps as I read it! Loved the story, specially the Karma bit. :)
ReplyDeleteWow this was kind of creepy but filled with suspense. Really like this one. It amazes me how much depth a person can achieve with only 9 sentences! This was awesome!
ReplyDeletewow...awesome post!! Excellently written!
ReplyDeleteOOH!! That's an engrossing and a riveting read!! True, you can't escape karma!!
ReplyDeleteSome powerful end there. Karma never leaves us...
ReplyDeleteRicha
Nice write Sfurti...tense and intense.
ReplyDeleteWhat an imagination!!! Amazing Sfurti!!! :)
ReplyDeleteAt first i thought you were describing the Grim Reaper. But its TRUE, after we're gone, its our actions and thoughts from our past that determine how we'll go down in history. We will either be good or bad memories, or fade into oblivion forever.
ReplyDeleteWell imagined.
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I am as fair as your actions were and as black as thoughts were which means from this moment on You Are Me. These lines are so true and written so well. Our Karma follows us. Good deed done have a positive impact even in next life. I do not know if after life exists.
ReplyDeleteLooked like a dream. Loved the ending.
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