Naked
in my dreams
Falling
through sky
Panting
and dry
Running
from wolfs
Sitting
on a tree
Sinking
in fire
Burning
in water
I am
naked in my dreams
My
visions are weird
My
lovers are none
My
heart is bleeding
And I
am running from guns
I cut
and I throttle
I cry
and I smother
I wear
my tears
I live
in my fears
And I
am naked
Naked
in my dreams
My follies
are my thoughts
My fiends
are my friends
I live
in a never land
With bricks
and stones to eat
I kick
everyone around
And I
get kicks
And I
am naked
Naked
in my dreams
I get
on the roof
And
look down
Only
thing I can see
Is the
dark and brown
Of my
unknown thoughts
Of my
bare soul
Of my stomach
pit
Brown
and black
Black
and grey
Covered
in ashes
Smeared
in blood
Clenching
my teeth
Gritting
my guts
Wearing
nothing but me
I am
naked
Naked
in my dreams
Dead
in my sleep
Falling
and dying
Sinking
and running
From
me
I don’t
know why
I am
naked in my dreams
Shared with OctPoWriMo Day#12 Shadows
Writer's note: The prompt suggested we write about our darker sides. My dreams are my darkest side...they always have been. I still call them dreams and not nightmares because I am not scared of them..may be they reflect my negetive mind frame that most of the times I refuse to acknowledge.
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DeleteBeautifully written with rhythm and flow. Thank the Lord this is only dream state!
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DeleteI loved this - it's energy, movement, honesty, and ahem, you seem to be in my dreams there? Superb!
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ReplyDeleteI am naked" are my favorite lines. Though there were so many other powerful lines in the poem you write. Its not just a poem, its an insight! So much to say but words cannot summarize my thoughts currently. Also I loved your spirit of still calling them dreams and not being afraid of them. You are one strong women!
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DeleteThis is so lovely...I really enjoyed reading this.. :)
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DeleteVery energetic lines.
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DeleteLovely !! just like bushra said
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DeleteRead your two poems, this one and the one on being alive. You weave words so lyrically, and can add magic to dark feelings. Excellent!
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DeleteI loved the last para the most :)
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Deleteperhaps it is safe to be afraid and naked in dreams, because they are not reality?
ReplyDeleteYes Laura perhaps :)
Deletein dreams sometimes we are what we feel deep inside... powerful poem...
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Delete"Naked in my dreams
ReplyDeleteDead in my sleep
Falling and dying
Sinking and running
From me
I don’t know why
I am naked in my dreams"
Just beautiful! :-)
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DeleteVery Nice Poem, . . . A G+ for Ur Post and Have a nice Day. . .. :)
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DeleteBrilliant! I love the flow of this one. Beautiful.
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DeleteThis reminds me of an animated short I watched pre-Oscar called "Feral." I did not understand it, truly, but the sense of naked wildness was there. In your piece, the threat from outside does not overpower that of the narrator, nor is there fear. You left that for the reader to worry about, and it worked on me.
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DeleteDear Sfurti, what a passionate words....sometimes we keep our life deep inside from others, hiding the truth, so we get relaxed in our sleep...~ here the link, may be it will of help. Thanks for sharing! <3 http://dreammoods.com/cgibin/dreamdictionarysearch.pl?method=exact&header=dreamsymbol&search=naked
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DeleteWow, those dreams sound heavy, and you have written them well, drawing the reader into their vortex. Well done.
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DeleteGreat writing! I'm always trying to connect with the meaning of my dreams. Yours sound fantastic. <3
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Deletethat is the true fearless and grand self without inhibitions....lovely lines Sfurti...
ReplyDeleteThanks Sumana :)
Deletea bit hallucinatory ~
ReplyDeleteIt is :)
DeleteThanks for reading!
A nice insightful poem.
ReplyDeletewow that's a very deep and dark dream, the descriptions very detailed. Maybe it means to fight all the inhibition. Very well written
ReplyDeleteI'm amazed at how well you write about the dark side so poetically: well done! :) <3
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