Sunday, 11 May 2014

Why?

She could feel the black, the cracks and the pores on her skin through which the smoke was coming out. She could smell the fire that was engulfing her whole being, inch by inch, part by part. She could hear the laughter coming from the other room; the laughs were filling her soul and were coming out as her muffled screams. She closed her eyes as her whole life ran in front of her, from her loving childhood, to her marriage, to her monstrous husband and in-laws and a tear fell through her eye, just one tear drop as she spoke her last words.
“Mom, why did you send me back?”

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This post is a part of Write Over the Weekend, an initiative for Indian Bloggers by BlogAdda.

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29 comments:

  1. Saurabh Chawla11 May 2014 at 03:33

    Touching one!

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  2. Unknown11 May 2014 at 05:01

    Oh.. it is a pity :(

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  3. preethi11 May 2014 at 05:05

    omg...that was good. different and thought provoking. all the best for the wow :)

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    1. Unknown12 May 2014 at 03:24

      Thanks Preethi and all the best to you too :)

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  4. Proactive Indian11 May 2014 at 05:18

    Totally different take on the prompt!
    It's good that you chose to highlight the fact that, often, mothers do not give support to their daughters when their daughters need that support the most.

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    1. Unknown12 May 2014 at 03:25

      Thanks. Yes I wish we can pass on more education. Life and self respect is more important than any relationship.

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  5. Cifar11 May 2014 at 05:55

    poignant, emotional

    MOM - Master Of all Matters

    Creator Of The Creators

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  6. Beloo Mehra11 May 2014 at 10:15

    Such a poignant and sad piece, told with so much emotion. Loved reading it, despite its sadness. You have given a very important reminder through this post.

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  7. Bikram12 May 2014 at 08:57

    Oh , that was sad and different ..
    but then the mother did not listen to her daughter I wonder what her thought is now ...

    Bikram

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  8. Roshni12 May 2014 at 22:18

    Just horrifying how each part of society actually supports such inhuman practices!

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  9. Rachna14 May 2014 at 00:33

    How very terrible! And the sad part is that it is widespread in our society :/.

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    1. Unknown16 July 2014 at 11:05

      Yes Rachna and widespread everywhere rural or urban!

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  10. Reema D'souza14 May 2014 at 08:42

    Oh my God! Though we tell that India is progressing many such cases do happen even today and that is really a shame. A nice take on the prompt.

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  11. Jean Katherine Baldridge17 May 2014 at 17:04

    So very powerful. what five sentences can say in the hands of a writer...who feels.
    thank you for sharing! jean

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  12. Arpita’s thoughts30 May 2014 at 01:55

    "Woman, realize your power, you are a human.. "

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  13. Pixie4 June 2014 at 11:48

    oh! :(
    that was sad, poignant..
    I could see the fire blazing..

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  14. Pooja Abhay13 June 2014 at 11:19

    Story of so many, noo? Sad. :(

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  15. Shailaja V9 July 2014 at 20:38

    Can I just say WOW? That was a well-deserved wow, by the way. Very eloquently captured, Sfurti!

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  16. The Bizza28 July 2014 at 19:56

    This is the most heartbreaking thing I've read in a long time. Well-written, and sobering recount of a wretched act.

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  17. Jim30 July 2014 at 11:27

    Those last lines were so sad. The whole writing was.
    Thank you for peeking in on me and for your nice comment.
    I am glad I returned to here. You wrote it so nicely
    with the feeling oozing from the page.
    ..

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