Saturday, 14 September 2013

Wilted (Haiku)

wilted meadow
thirsty birds
a  sweltering Indian summer

File:Bierstadt Albert Indian Summer Hudson River.jpg

Image credit here

22 comments:

  1. I like this: I just wonder if you thought of experimenting with the lines in a different order? Thirsty birds might work well at the end?
    Nice picture too!

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    1. Hey thanks so much dear. Wow if we exchange the lines..it adds a new leaf to the haiku.

      "wilted meadow
      a sweltering Indian summer
      thirsty birds".

      Thanks so much!!

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  2. Nice image rich poem. Well done.

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  3. Indian Summer is simply unbearable. Nice one Sfurti.

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  4. Ah! Thank God summer is over!!
    Else I would have gone mad...

    Indian summer... Nice :)

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    1. Haha Satya :). I hate the heat but I love Summers!! Thanks so much :)

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  5. Sfurti this is very well written. Scorching summer heat is unbearable. More so for poor animals.

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  6. nice sketch of the blazing days........

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  7. Our sweltering climate is the culprit. Lovely Haiku.

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  8. good one..

    hey.. I am sharing my Liebster moment with you... my wishes..
    http://ratnibbles.blogspot.in/2013/09/my-award-moment.html

    have a great weekend.

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    1. Thanks Meera. Yay my first ever Liebster!!! Thanks :)

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  9. A very good haiku this... summers in some parts of the country are really difficult..

    RS:)

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  10. a treat for my senses,,,,lovely

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  11. Summer!!! Just the name is enough to make me sweat!

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